Blind vs Vision
Surroundings, environment, physical ability and mental ability are some of the reasons people have to adapt. This is the same for people who are blind.
Caleb and Crandall are the same in several ways. They are both male, living in the same home with the same mom and dad (which makes them brothers). They both have brown hair and blue eyes and they were both born in April. They both enjoy some of the same hobbies and activities. However, when it comes to how their hobbies and activities are performed they are very different. Crandall is an average, 13 year old with vision and he does things as most people with vision do them. Caleb is blind and has been since birth. He has overcome his disability but performs tasks differently.
Crandall and Caleb enjoy sports, the way sports are done and the kind of sports is different. Crandall plays baseball on several leagues and takes pitching lessons. Caleb does not enjoy this kind of sport and does not even like going to the games. He does, however, enjoy running the 100-yard and 200-yard dash in track with a sighted guide.
Riding four-wheelers is an activity both Crandall and Caleb enjoy. Crandall gets on and goes through the woods with no problems, he takes his time and watches for trees and bumps. Caleb has to wait on someone to ride him; he cannot just jump on and go. He likes for the person riding him to go fast, the faster the better. A car will be the same way when Crandall is old enough to drive, Caleb will not ever be able to drive a car.
Hunting is an activity they both enjoy. Crandall has shot several deer over the past few years. He also goes to see other animals in their natural habitat. When darkness comes Crandall is very ready for his dad or someone to come get him from the deer stand and walk him out of the woods. Caleb enjoys going hunting but his experience is much different. He can hear the animals before Crandall sees them. He hears the leaves rustle with the wind and the rabbits or squirrels scurry around. He has never shot a deer and when darkness falls he could care less, he could probably stay all night and not be bothered.
We all have fear of some kind and to some degree. For Crandall fear is the same as it is for most people with vision. Like most people Crandall able to see what is coming toward him or what is right in front of him about to happen, has more fear about trying new things. Fear for Crandall sets in before he ever reached the top of the bungee platform because of the height. Caleb not able to see the height, just as not knowing when darkness has fallen while in the woods, has no fear and enjoys these types of activities.
Fear of a bonfire or fireplace is just the opposite from the darkness and heights. Crandall being like most boys is curious about the fire. He likes to build the bonfires, poke sticks in the fire and roast marshmallows. Caleb cannot see the fire but he can feel the heat and hear the wood crackle. This makes him aware of what he cannot see and he stays back not approaching the fire fearing he will get too close and be burned.
Crandall uses his sight as his main sense with all other senses being secondary. Caleb’s lack of sight enhances all of his other senses. While showing the differences in a blind person vs a person with vision, senses have played the primary roll in why a lot of the differences are present. Other then just the normal differences found in most brothers, the obvious difference of one with vision and one who is blind are many. The use of their senses and the way they are used is the main difference between Caleb (blind) and Crandall (vision), who at first and on the surface seem so much alike.
Monday, October 19, 2009
Tuesday, October 6, 2009
thoughts on the process of example essay
During the writing of my example essay, I found it very difficult to organize my thoughts. Even though I had my thoughts and examples wrote out putting them into essay form was difficult. So organization was the toughest aspect for me during this paper.
During the peer review, I received a couple of comments. The comments at first felt like an attack on my personal information or feelings. It took me a day or so to realize the peer review comments were to help me and I would not have wanted them to make it roses and sunshine to save my feelings. I appreciate the honest critics I received. I also realized it was not a personal attack on their part even though I took it personal...The comments are greatly appreciated and I completely revised my essay and feel it is much better now. Thank you again to those who commented and for your honesty.
I have had some frustration with the reading of other blogs that was assigned to me. I enjoy reading others essay, this too helps ME. I have not been able to get on a couple of the bogs that were assigned.
Thanks, Mimo
Wednesday, September 30, 2009
Revised example essay
I would just like to say thank you to those who read my blog and gave me critical but very helpful advise and comments on my example essay...I am reposting the revised essay and I hope the two people who read it and helped me will reread it. Thanks!!!!!!!!!
Sibling Rivalry-------example essay REVISED!!!!
Sibling rivalry is found in any home with more than one child and can start as
soon as the second child is born due to jealousy of the amount of time and attention
parents give the new arrival. The sibling rivalry can also be delayed which is what
happened with our family. The delay in sibling rivalry was most likely due to the gender
order of birth with a daughter first, Gabriele followed by two boys, Travis and Mitchell.
Gabriele being three years older settled into the “big sister” role fairly easily after
Travis was born. She frequently wanted to give him a bottle, change his clothes and rock
him. The household was peaceful and free from the sibling rivalry until Travis was 1 ½
years old which is when Mitchell was born and the sibling rivalry began, at least between
brothers, with Travis bidding for attention. Travis was off the bottle, however when his
younger brother was born he felt it necessary to take his bottle for himself, telling us he
was just trying to help feed the baby or he was just bringing it to me. The infant cradle
was entirely to small for Travis but this is where he wanted to sleep since his baby
brother got to sleep there.
At this time Gabriele was still playing the “big sister” role with Mitchell but it
seemed Travis was caught in the middle with the sibling rivalry on both sides of him,
coming from his older sister and him passing it down to his new baby brother. Gabriele,
Travis and Mitchell could have been and still could be the poster children for sibling
rivalry and they are no different from any other siblings. The sibling rivalry was part of
daily life.
In the early preschool and elementary years the rivalry was as simple as who was
going to be “the banker” in a game of Monopoly or which chair each of them sat in
to watch TV. Gabriele being the oldest thought she should be“the banker” and of
course, Travis being the oldest boy thought it should be his job to be “the banker”. Not
taking sides, not jumping to conclusion, to be fair and because I enjoyed it, I usually
ended up sitting on the floor with them doing the banker’s job myself. Taking turns was
an option but that lead to more rivalry because they were rarely happy with how the other
one was counting the money. When the rivalry started about which chair each of them sat
in while watching TV they of course all wanted the same chair. To be fair they ended up
sitting on the floor.
With an age difference of only 14 months it seemed the rivalry never ended
between Travis and Mitchell. Starting with the bottle and cradle incidents and moving on
to toy trucks, cars or building blocks. They took a truck from the other ones pile or
knocked over the other ones fort they had built out of the blocks. Gabriele and Mitchell
had very few rivalry moments because she still thought of him as “the baby” or “her
baby” and he usually got his way, until it was time to take a trip in the car. The rivalry
began as we walked out the door when all of them shouted, “I have shotgun” which
meant they wanted to sit in the front seat.
As they all got older the sibling rivalry was still present but on a new level. When
Gabriele started to drive and had a curfew, her favorite statement was “I bet Travis and
Mitchell won’t have to be home this early” or “Travis and Mitchell are going to get to go
where ever they want”. Now that Travis is driving, his favorite thing to bring up is that
Gabriele did not have to call and check in when she started driving or she had a better car
then he does. Travis and Mitchell now rival about who is going to take out the trash,
who is going to cut the grass or who has the coolest friends. Gabriele still considers
Mitchell as “the baby” and he still gets his way with her most of the time.
Sibling rivalry is not a “new” concept it has been around since the beginning of
time, Cain and Abel to be exact. Sibling rivalry can even be found in fairy tales,
Cinderella and the step-sisters for example. Sibling rivalry has not changed much and still
exists all you need is a two or more children home. With more than two siblings all of
them may not have a rivalry. It may be that they rival with one sibling but not all of them.
As the mother of three children I have often made the statement, “I wish I could
find a cure for sibling rivalry and bottle it, I could make a fortune”. But sibling rivalry is
a competition. Competition has been labeled as a “good thing”, but in reality competition
is necessary and a part of life, just as sibling rivalry is necessary and a part of life. There
are various reasons why sibling rivalry exists, to get attention, to find their role in the
home, fear and jealousy are a few reasons. As long as families have more than one
child sibling rivalry will continue. The age and/or gender of the siblings does not really
make the rivalry better or worse, two or more brothers, two or more sisters or a brother
and a sister, it is all the same. However, the gender order could postpone the sibling
rivalry for a year or two.
Sibling Rivalry-------example essay REVISED!!!!
Sibling rivalry is found in any home with more than one child and can start as
soon as the second child is born due to jealousy of the amount of time and attention
parents give the new arrival. The sibling rivalry can also be delayed which is what
happened with our family. The delay in sibling rivalry was most likely due to the gender
order of birth with a daughter first, Gabriele followed by two boys, Travis and Mitchell.
Gabriele being three years older settled into the “big sister” role fairly easily after
Travis was born. She frequently wanted to give him a bottle, change his clothes and rock
him. The household was peaceful and free from the sibling rivalry until Travis was 1 ½
years old which is when Mitchell was born and the sibling rivalry began, at least between
brothers, with Travis bidding for attention. Travis was off the bottle, however when his
younger brother was born he felt it necessary to take his bottle for himself, telling us he
was just trying to help feed the baby or he was just bringing it to me. The infant cradle
was entirely to small for Travis but this is where he wanted to sleep since his baby
brother got to sleep there.
At this time Gabriele was still playing the “big sister” role with Mitchell but it
seemed Travis was caught in the middle with the sibling rivalry on both sides of him,
coming from his older sister and him passing it down to his new baby brother. Gabriele,
Travis and Mitchell could have been and still could be the poster children for sibling
rivalry and they are no different from any other siblings. The sibling rivalry was part of
daily life.
In the early preschool and elementary years the rivalry was as simple as who was
going to be “the banker” in a game of Monopoly or which chair each of them sat in
to watch TV. Gabriele being the oldest thought she should be“the banker” and of
course, Travis being the oldest boy thought it should be his job to be “the banker”. Not
taking sides, not jumping to conclusion, to be fair and because I enjoyed it, I usually
ended up sitting on the floor with them doing the banker’s job myself. Taking turns was
an option but that lead to more rivalry because they were rarely happy with how the other
one was counting the money. When the rivalry started about which chair each of them sat
in while watching TV they of course all wanted the same chair. To be fair they ended up
sitting on the floor.
With an age difference of only 14 months it seemed the rivalry never ended
between Travis and Mitchell. Starting with the bottle and cradle incidents and moving on
to toy trucks, cars or building blocks. They took a truck from the other ones pile or
knocked over the other ones fort they had built out of the blocks. Gabriele and Mitchell
had very few rivalry moments because she still thought of him as “the baby” or “her
baby” and he usually got his way, until it was time to take a trip in the car. The rivalry
began as we walked out the door when all of them shouted, “I have shotgun” which
meant they wanted to sit in the front seat.
As they all got older the sibling rivalry was still present but on a new level. When
Gabriele started to drive and had a curfew, her favorite statement was “I bet Travis and
Mitchell won’t have to be home this early” or “Travis and Mitchell are going to get to go
where ever they want”. Now that Travis is driving, his favorite thing to bring up is that
Gabriele did not have to call and check in when she started driving or she had a better car
then he does. Travis and Mitchell now rival about who is going to take out the trash,
who is going to cut the grass or who has the coolest friends. Gabriele still considers
Mitchell as “the baby” and he still gets his way with her most of the time.
Sibling rivalry is not a “new” concept it has been around since the beginning of
time, Cain and Abel to be exact. Sibling rivalry can even be found in fairy tales,
Cinderella and the step-sisters for example. Sibling rivalry has not changed much and still
exists all you need is a two or more children home. With more than two siblings all of
them may not have a rivalry. It may be that they rival with one sibling but not all of them.
As the mother of three children I have often made the statement, “I wish I could
find a cure for sibling rivalry and bottle it, I could make a fortune”. But sibling rivalry is
a competition. Competition has been labeled as a “good thing”, but in reality competition
is necessary and a part of life, just as sibling rivalry is necessary and a part of life. There
are various reasons why sibling rivalry exists, to get attention, to find their role in the
home, fear and jealousy are a few reasons. As long as families have more than one
child sibling rivalry will continue. The age and/or gender of the siblings does not really
make the rivalry better or worse, two or more brothers, two or more sisters or a brother
and a sister, it is all the same. However, the gender order could postpone the sibling
rivalry for a year or two.
Wednesday, September 23, 2009
example essay
Sibling Rivalry
Gabriele, Travis and Mitchell could be the poster children for sibling rivalry.
During the time right after Gabriele’s brothers were born, she adored them and being
three years older she settled into the “big sister” role fairly easily. She always wanted to
give them a bottle, change their clothes and rock them. Everything was great until Travis
was about three years old and Mitchell was about two years old. This is when the sibling
rivalry “tug of war” began.
Gabriele, Travis and Mitchell are not different from any other siblings, the rivalry
is part of daily life. In the early preschool and elementary years the rivalry was as simple
as who was going to be “the banker” in a game of Monopoly or which chair each of them
would sit in to watch TV. Gabriele being the oldest always thought she should get to be
“the banker” and of course, Travis being the oldest boy thought it should be his job to be
“the banker”. Taking turns was an option but that lead to more rivalry because they were
never happy with how the other one was doing it. I usually ended up sitting on the floor
with them doing the banker’s job. When the rivalry would start about which chair each of
them sat in while watching TV, it was the same as the Monopoly game except they were
the ones who ended up sitting on the floor.
Travis and Mitchell being only 14 months apart always had the rivalry going on,
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usually over toy trucks, cars and/or blocks. Each of them taking a truck from the other
ones pile or knocking over the other ones fort they had built out of the blocks. Gabriele
and Mitchell had very few rivalry moments because she still thought of him as “the baby”
or “her baby” and he usually got his way, until it was time to take a trip in the car. The
rivalry would begin as we walked out the door with all of them shouting, “I have
shotgun” which meant they wanted to sit in the front seat.
As they all got older the sibling rivalry was still present but on a new level. When
Gabriele started driving and had a curfew, her favorite statement was “I bet Travis and
Mitchell won’t have to be home this early” or “Travis and Mitchell are going to get to go
where ever they want”. Now that Travis is driving, his favorite thing to bring up is that
Gabriele did not have to call and check in when she started driving or she had a better car
than he does. Travis and Mitchell now rival about who is going to take out the trash,
who is going to cut the grass or who has the coolest friends. Gabriele still considers
Mitchell as “the baby” and he still gets his way with her most of the time.
Rivalry between siblings is not a “new” concept it has been around since the
beginning of time, Cain and Abel to be exact. Unlike everything else, it has not changed
much, sibling rivalry still exists all you need are the siblings. The age and/or gender of
the siblings does not really make the rivalry better or worse, two or more brothers, two or
more sisters or a brother and a sister, it is all the same. With more then two siblings all of
them may not have a rivalry. It may be that they rival with one sibling but not all of them.
As a parent of siblings I have often made the statement, “I wish I could find a cure
for sibling rivalry and bottle it, I could make a fortune”. But I also like to think of sibling
Mock 3
rivalry as competition. Competition has been labeled as a “good thing”, but in reality
competition is a necessity, just as sibling rivalry is a necessity. To get attention, to find
their place in the home, to build individual personalities and because it is plain human
nature are various reasons why we have sibling rivalry.
Gabriele, Travis and Mitchell could be the poster children for sibling rivalry.
During the time right after Gabriele’s brothers were born, she adored them and being
three years older she settled into the “big sister” role fairly easily. She always wanted to
give them a bottle, change their clothes and rock them. Everything was great until Travis
was about three years old and Mitchell was about two years old. This is when the sibling
rivalry “tug of war” began.
Gabriele, Travis and Mitchell are not different from any other siblings, the rivalry
is part of daily life. In the early preschool and elementary years the rivalry was as simple
as who was going to be “the banker” in a game of Monopoly or which chair each of them
would sit in to watch TV. Gabriele being the oldest always thought she should get to be
“the banker” and of course, Travis being the oldest boy thought it should be his job to be
“the banker”. Taking turns was an option but that lead to more rivalry because they were
never happy with how the other one was doing it. I usually ended up sitting on the floor
with them doing the banker’s job. When the rivalry would start about which chair each of
them sat in while watching TV, it was the same as the Monopoly game except they were
the ones who ended up sitting on the floor.
Travis and Mitchell being only 14 months apart always had the rivalry going on,
Mock 2
usually over toy trucks, cars and/or blocks. Each of them taking a truck from the other
ones pile or knocking over the other ones fort they had built out of the blocks. Gabriele
and Mitchell had very few rivalry moments because she still thought of him as “the baby”
or “her baby” and he usually got his way, until it was time to take a trip in the car. The
rivalry would begin as we walked out the door with all of them shouting, “I have
shotgun” which meant they wanted to sit in the front seat.
As they all got older the sibling rivalry was still present but on a new level. When
Gabriele started driving and had a curfew, her favorite statement was “I bet Travis and
Mitchell won’t have to be home this early” or “Travis and Mitchell are going to get to go
where ever they want”. Now that Travis is driving, his favorite thing to bring up is that
Gabriele did not have to call and check in when she started driving or she had a better car
than he does. Travis and Mitchell now rival about who is going to take out the trash,
who is going to cut the grass or who has the coolest friends. Gabriele still considers
Mitchell as “the baby” and he still gets his way with her most of the time.
Rivalry between siblings is not a “new” concept it has been around since the
beginning of time, Cain and Abel to be exact. Unlike everything else, it has not changed
much, sibling rivalry still exists all you need are the siblings. The age and/or gender of
the siblings does not really make the rivalry better or worse, two or more brothers, two or
more sisters or a brother and a sister, it is all the same. With more then two siblings all of
them may not have a rivalry. It may be that they rival with one sibling but not all of them.
As a parent of siblings I have often made the statement, “I wish I could find a cure
for sibling rivalry and bottle it, I could make a fortune”. But I also like to think of sibling
Mock 3
rivalry as competition. Competition has been labeled as a “good thing”, but in reality
competition is a necessity, just as sibling rivalry is a necessity. To get attention, to find
their place in the home, to build individual personalities and because it is plain human
nature are various reasons why we have sibling rivalry.
Tuesday, September 22, 2009
Goodmorning, I have had a busy weekend. We had a family reunion on Saturday. There was a lot of food, fried chicken, vegetables, casseroles, salads and an entire table full of desserts. After everyone ate and the food was put away, the guitars were brought out and we all sang different songs from gospel to country and even a little old rock. It was also great to see everyone especially those that I have not seen since last family reunion. On Sunday afternoon I went to a Tastefully Simple party were you sample different types of food, dips, sauces, seasonings, breads and sweets. I am ready for another weekend since this last one was so full. I hope everyone has a great week!!!
Wednesday, September 16, 2009
CHALLENGES I FACED WITH MY COMPOSITION
Since my composition was based on a real life experience and real feelings it was very hard to put those feelings to paper without sounding like a "mother" just rambling about her child. I wanted people to be able to feel the way the atmosphere, room and attitudes were without leaving out how the emotional stress was intesified. I hope and I believe I accomplished this, though it was difficult. My second challenge was just simply the subject itself. I enjoy talking and writing about my son and his journey through cancer but my feelings are still very raw were this is concerned, I cried everytime I worked on the composition. My friends and family tell me those are cleansing tears and I believe them because I always feel better AFTER talking/writing about it.
Reading other's blogs was very enjoyable to me. I was able to invision and feel there experience. It showed me just how different we all really are. I do not think I read any two papers that consisted of the same information or experience. I also think it makes me realize my errors as I read other compositions and could see how things were worded or discribed. There were a couple of compositions I read that really just did not understand, however those were words, sentences and paragraphs from someone elses heart and mind. Even though I did not understand them I am glad I read them.
I was shocked at the responses I received on my blog about my composition. It is truly emotional to write but it is something much deeper when you know others read your writings and enjoyed them or even did not enjoy them, but they took the time to read them.
Hope everyone has a great week,
Mimo
Reading other's blogs was very enjoyable to me. I was able to invision and feel there experience. It showed me just how different we all really are. I do not think I read any two papers that consisted of the same information or experience. I also think it makes me realize my errors as I read other compositions and could see how things were worded or discribed. There were a couple of compositions I read that really just did not understand, however those were words, sentences and paragraphs from someone elses heart and mind. Even though I did not understand them I am glad I read them.
I was shocked at the responses I received on my blog about my composition. It is truly emotional to write but it is something much deeper when you know others read your writings and enjoyed them or even did not enjoy them, but they took the time to read them.
Hope everyone has a great week,
Mimo
Tuesday, September 8, 2009
We, my family and I, Had a great Labor Day weekend...we did not do alot but spend time together but that was great and what we needed. We cleaned up the yard, watched TV, boiled peanuts, grilled chicken and hamburgers, watched the Bulldogs lose and watched the first Nascar night race in Atlanta. Now the week begins with school and getting back into a routine. I have my first college exam on Thursday and I am a little nervous... I know the material(or I think I do) but well I am still nervous. I hope everyone had a great weekend and have had a great start to a new week.
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